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Question 1: What was your first impression when reading the post?

Considering the relevance of the topic, what is your perspective? Have you dealt with the subject or been aware of its importance worldwide?

Does the thesis sentence have the following elements? If not, what is missing, and what suggestions can you make? Thesis statement elements: Author's stance- strategies the author uses to support their position, the success or failure of making the point.

Review the introduction and provide feedback. Address the following questions specifically:

Opening sentence: Does it engage the reader?

Does the introduction give enough information (summary) so the audience understands the topic and the author's position?

Is the thesis statement included?

What is one revision or adjustment that can make the introduction stronger?

"Our Blind Spot About Guns"

In the article "Our Blind Spot About Guns," Nicholas Kristof argues that gun regulations are non-existent compared to those enforced on cars and that changing these regulations on guns would save lives.

My thesis is constructive and contains the necessary elements, such as the topic and the author's stance. No feedback was given by the instructor.

Introduction and revised thesis:

In the article "Our Blind Spot About Guns," Nicholas Kristof explains the history of fatality rates of those in vehicular accidents. Instead of confiscating cars from the people, we set up rules and regulations on cars, street laws, and drivers. He further discusses the similarities between vehicles and guns and the saying that we could've said back then- "Cars don't kill people. People kill people." Rather than proclaiming a phrase that is not all true, we built a system that protects humans from themselves, so why can't we do the same for guns? Kristof makes his argument clear as he describes the similarities between vehicles, death rates, and regulations compared to today's guns, death rates, and the lack of rules. He argues that gun regulations are non-existent in comparison to those enforced on cars and that by changing these regulations on guns, we would save lives.