Tips for college students

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Topic: Tips for college students

My Thesis Statement: The reason students succeed in college is because time is spent in pursuing grant/scholarship searches and use tips for keeping expenses down. (Teacher comments: I am unclear as to how these two things contribute to students' success in college. How might you revise for clarity?)

I. Going back to college tips

A. Benefits and tips for going back to college

1. Tips for making an academic plan

2. Tips for defining educational goals

B. Future career tips (Teacher comments: Your subpoints and supporting details don't seem to relate to main point #1 "going back to college tips". You may want to consider breaking these into separate sections.)

1. Tips for opening more career doors

2. Tips for boosting salary requirements

II. Tips for scheduling classes and job performance (Teacher comments: Time management seems to be the main idea here. How might you craft a topic sentence to reflect that?)

A. Tips for how many courses per semester

1. Study tips

2. Time management tips for studying

B. Tips for how much time for work

1. Tips for job performance

2. Time management tips for working

III. Grant and scholarship searching

A. Grant searching tips

1. Where to search for grants tips

2. Tips for setting aside time for grant searching

B. Scholarship searching tips

1. Tips on where to search for scholarship

2. Tips for setting aside time for scholarship searching

IV. Tips for bringing expenses down to barebones with a strict budget

A. Tips on getting utilities and phone bill down to barebones

1. Tips on how to talk to utility company about levelized pay agreements

2. Tips on how to lower phone bill

B. Tips on shopping and lowering gas consumption

1. Tips on shopping for groceries and necessities

2. Tips on how to lower gas consumption

The above information is how the paper is developing . (Teacher comments: Where will you be getting this information? Please review APA formating guidelines for in-text citations and the proper way to incorporate source material. The assignment asked that you include information from two sources in your outline and cite them!)

Reference Page Entry

Blake, K. Controlling college debt (1998, October). Vol. 81 Issue 10, p2, 1/2p.

Consumers' Research Magazine, 81 (Issue 10), . (Teacher comments: Extra period!)

In-Text Citation

1. [Insert the paraphrased material] (Blake, 1998).

2. Blake (1998) [Insert the paraphrased material].

3. According to Blake (1998) “[Insert the quotation ]” (p. p2,1/2p). (Teacher comments: These should go in the outline and/or the body of the essay at the point where you are using material and/or ideas from your sources. See Comment #4.)

Reference Page Entry

College Scholarships. (2010). 118 Ways to Save Money in College. Retrieved

(Teacher comments: Good work, overall with your reference list entries! There are still some formatting errors, though! [Please check the Reference and Citation Examples document in the Tutorials & Guides section of the Center for Writing Excellence section of the Center for Writing Excellence for examples of correct formatting. Then carefully check your citations and references to be sure that they are formatted correctly.)

In-Text Citation

1. [Insert the paraphrased material] (College Scholarships, 2010).

2. The College Scholarships (2010) website [Insert the paraphrased material].

3. According to College Scholarships (2010), "[Insert the quotation]” (Managing the money you have, para. 1 - 118).

CheckPoint: Topic Outline & Working Reference List

16 Points Possible Points Possible Points Earned Comments

Appendix D is used as a guide to create the topic outline.

• A revised thesis is included.

• The essay’s tentative organizational structure is clear and logical. Includes a minimum of 4 main topics (with supporting details). Topics and supporting details are specific and comprised of complete phrases and/or sentences.

• Outline includes material from at least two sources from working references (Appendix E).

• All outside material is cited correctly using proper APA format. 10 7.5 Nice work on your outline, overall! Your general organization is very clear! Please remember that each supporting detail must support the subpoint that it is associated with and the subpoints, in turn, must support your thesis statement. You’ll need to be much more specific with your supporting details in the draft of your body paragraphs. Please continue to work on in-text citations. Also, see my in-text comments.

Appendix E is used as a guide to create the working references list.

• List includes at least two credible sources.

• List uses proper APA format. 6 5 Your sources look credible! Please continue to work on APA format. Also, see my in-text comments.

Mechanics

4 Points Possible Points Possible Points Earned Comments

Rules of grammar, usage and punctuation are followed. 2 2 Well-done!

Spelling is correct, and work has been carefully proofread. 2 2 Good job!

Total Points 20 16.5 Submitted on Time?

Date Due 8/10/10 Yes!

Adjusted Points 16.5 Comments: Keep up the good work, Terrie, and let me know if you have any questions! I’ll look forward to reading your body paragraphs!

Final Grade B-

I need all the help that I can get, this teacher has me confused on this paper... We have to do a 900 word "Draft of Body Paragraphs" by sunday for constructive feedback with APA style standards to format intext citations and references.

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