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Final Draft Worksheet
Using your essay in response to the unit's writing prompt, complete the following steps to improve your essay.
Essay With Revisions
2. Insert your entire essay here. Include any revisions your instructor asked you to make.
From "fact sheets" by the University of Washington, did you know there is a connection between mental illness and violence being promoted by social media? The mentally incomapcitated society have been demoralized for a plethora of years. Social media has had a caustic relationship with the mentally ill for a myriad of years. We need to help the mentally challenged society to improve their lives. We need to quit discriminating against the handicapped society. We must quit thinking of them as dangerous because we do not understand them. We have to stand together so there is no more discrimination, no more provide healthcare, provide jobs.
3. Mental illness is like a disease and we have to stand together and figure out the best ways to care for the people that have it. We need to get them working in the world with job programs. The "MentalHealthWork.com" is a good way for people with mental disabilities to get jobs. People need jobs in order to stay active in the community to provide their services. It is a good social zone for the mentally challenged because it provides a experience they might have never known.
4. Discrimination is big part of why it is so hard for them to find jobs. There have been many cases were job employers discriminate against a Pearson due to their mental state. From "HR hub.com" article "The jury awards 13 million in disability discrimination case." It states "The jury found that Chuck E. Cheese violated the employment provisions of the ADA by discriminating against Donald Perkle when they fired him due to his disability, mental retardation." This shows even today people with disabilities are being targeted and losing jobs.
1. We have to figure out a way to provide health care to the mentally challenged community. We need to create programs so they can contribute and feel part of the family. A program that helps the mentally incapacitated get a job is "MentalHealthWork.com". This site helps mentally challenged people find good jobs to be more active in the community. Once they have job they can afford their own health care accept the one that is provided for them. For example medicate is provided for the mentally disabled.
Grammar
2. Check your essay for grammatical errors. Highlight or underline any parts of your essay that should be corrected.
- Look for incorrect uses of "who" and "whom."
- Look for incorrect uses of "affect" and effect."
- Look for sentences that are not using proper parallel structure.
3. Correct the grammatical errors you identified and place your revised essay here.
Transitions
4. In your revised essay above, highlight the transitions you used. Based on your highlighting, what can you do to improve your transitions? Do you need to: include transitions, use more advanced transitions, or revise some of your transitions in different ways?
Explain here how you will improve your essay by revising your transitions.
5. Use the transition sheet to help you revise your transitions. Paste your revised essay here.
Conclusion
6. Copy and paste your concluding paragraph below.
7. Review your concluding paragraph:
- Highlight the transition you used to signal closure?
- Underline where you have synthesized or summarized your main points and their significance?
- Bold what you have done to challenge your readers.
8. Review your marked concluding paragraph. Revise your conclusion to make it stronger and place the revision here.
Final Read Through - Final Draft
9. Copy and paste your final draft here, including your newly revised conclusion paragraph. Be sure to include the works cited portion. Read your essay out loud once more to find any last errors to correct. You are done!