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Re-write the following sentences, focusing on the Writing Improvement topic:

Focus on ACTIVE VOICE. Remember, business writing is more forceful when you use active-voice verbs. Revise the following sentences so that verbs are in the active voice. Put the emphasis on the DOER of the action.

1. Workers were asked to wear badges with tiny sensors to monitor their communication and activity patterns at Bank of America.

2. Tracking devices are being installed by many companies to gather real-time information on how employees interact.

3. Reliable data about how workers do their jobs are difficult to collect.

Focus on PASSIVE VOICE. When indirectness or tact is required, use passive-voice verbs. Revise the following active-voice sentences so that they are in the passive voice.

4. Michelle made a serious error in our annual tax figures.

5. We discovered the error too late to correct the annual report.

Focus on PARALLELISM. Revise the following sentences so that their parts are balanced.

6. Critics complain that young people today are obsessed with playing video games, taking selfies, and they are constantly checking their Facebook pages.

7. To be hired, an applicant must be reliable, creative, and show enthusiasm.

8. Recent graduates are seeking jobs that are stimulating and a challenge.

Focus on DANGLING AND MISPLACED MODIFIERS. Revise the following sentences to avoid dangling and misplaced modifiers.

9. While interviewing applicants, questions are often asked by recruiters about qualifications.

10. To be reimbursed, the enclosed application must be filled out and returned.