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Editor's Challenge 11
The following letter contains 30 intentional errors representing language principles covered thus far, spelling, and proofreading. Edit the letter and print it with a 2-inch top margin. Use the current date. Delete these instructions.
[Insert current date]
Ms. Jessica Stoudenmire
Holiday Travel Agency
520 West Third Street
New York, NY 10013
Dear Ms. Stoudemire:
At Elite Tropical Cruise Lines, my colleagues and myself genuinely appreciate the loyalty of Holiday Travel Agency and its continuing use of the "Voyager Ship" line for your holiday tour packages for travelers' of all ages. As our customers know, the "Voyager Ship" is more luxurious than any cruise ship in the world, offering the enjoyablest activities on the seas.
A wide range of guests have experienced unforgettable cruises to unique and exotic ports of call. These type of positive experiences have inspired our guests to return year after year. It is our long standing policy to try and offer fun, sun, and exciting tours to these guests, including high school and college students. Recently, however, some of our younger guests has been loud and disruptive. Last year we raised the drinking age from 18 to 21, but this plan didn't work very good. Because of unruly young people, some passengers couldn't barely enjoy their travel aboard our cruise ships.
As a result, we are now instituting a new policy. Effective immediately, any passenger under the age of 21 will only be excepted when accompanied by a adult over 25. If this new policy will effect your student tour packages, we hope you will agree that the reasons behind us instituting this new policy required serious action. Elite Tropicals goal is to provide a real relaxing environment for all its passengers. Promoting family packages are one way in which we help high-school and college students join their family's for vacation fun away from the stresses of every day life.
Expecting carefree fun filled vacations, your customers will not be dissappointed by Elite Tropical. We attract more guests then any cruise line in the world, and 98 percent of our guests reports that they are very satisfied. To keep them satisfied, our experienced staff is developing a number of exciting new tours. Enclosed is our schedule for spring and summer Elite Tropical cruises. If you would be willing to work with me to plan new packages for your New York customers. My staff and I will call you during the week of January 5.
Sincerely,
(Your Name)
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