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Question: People define home in many ways. Some may say it is an apartment building or a duplex, but in reality those are only examples of houses, physical structures where people reside. A home on the other hand is much more than those. A physical structure may be an important aspect of a home but does not define one. Human Beings are social creatures, and a home plays an essential part of a human's nature. Many people in this world or culture believe that they have a home, but what does it really mean to have a home? A true home is a place where one is loved. Because love is an abstract concept and can be demonstrated in multiple ways, a home can demonstrate it through giving corrections, showing support, and creating memories.

A home is a place that gives corrections. No human being is perfect and is always in need of correction. This can take place from a father spanking his five year old son for misbehaving in a restaurant to classmates giving corrections in grammatical errors in the speech of a fellow student. While receiving corrections is not always pleasant, they are usually beneficial for that person's growth. When corrections are not given especially in a trustworthy place, like the home, the individual may continue to make mistakes ultimately leading to bad habits or continuous mistakes. A true home should not refrain from giving corrections where they are needed, but lovingly tell one what they did wrong to help them improve.

Showing support is another facet of a true home. People enjoy it when people in their lives support them in one's decisions or actions. A home is where support should be shown. Support can take place anywhere from a mother cheering on her son in a football game, a father helping his daughter financially in college, an older brother helping his sister in geometry to classmates watching one's presentation. Not only is support a vital part to a true home but a necessity as well. When a home shows support to oneself it helps them in multiple ways. An individual may feel more motivated or encouraged to continue in the plans or ideas one had in mind. On the other hand, when support is not shown, the individual may be put down emotionally, or may feel isolated or left out. In other words while support can be seen in multiple ways, a home should be the center of it all.

Memories are another essential part of a true home. Every home is an area in one's life where many memories should be made. Memories can be anything from going on a week trip with your family to Grandfather Mountain, to going on a field trip to Charleston, South Carolina or simply playing video games with your friend group in what many people correctly say "one's home away from home." While memories may be great, bad memories may also be very important. Unpleasant memories made in a home serve as experience or teaching moments, which are very valuable tools as one grows in their life. Both good and bad memories define an individual's life. In conclusion a true home should be the center of the memories that define one's life.

A true home is a place where one is loved in the form of correction, support and creates memories. Every true home has these three characteristics and should be the place where these three facets are seen the most. Any place that does not have these traits is not a true home. These three facets bring out a very important conclusion that a home is not a place, but a people that truly love one. Loving people around is what a home really is. Apartments and Houses are empty without the people living inside of them. In reality the people inside a house make a home. One should strive to promote these qualities in any home, because ultimately they are not only good for the individual but for the uplifting of the home as well.

 

Read slowly through the essay for a general understanding. Does the essay follow the assignment? (This is the most important aspect.) Does the author present a definition of one of the assigned terms? Is the essay's focus on developing that definition?
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