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1) Only the three body paragraphs were required. The introduction and the conclusion were not to be included in the Unit 6 paper. They should be saved for the Unit 8 paper when the thesis will be moved to the end of the introduction.

2) You paper is already over the length limit, so nothing else can be added. Some parts could be deleted, for example: "Samimi and Jenatabadi (2014), point out that" and "In another article, Sandbrook and Güven (2014) asserted that." Those phrases add nothing to the paper and are distracting. You would have to explain who they are, so eliminate that phrase and others like it.

3) Keep in mind that your paper is not a literature review. It is an essay in which you are to explain your topic clearly and concisely. Also keep in mind that your topic is one that is difficult to understand and you are not writing for economists or for those with Ph.D.'s. Write in a manner that your average reader can comprehend. Explain concepts clearly in non-jargon type language. Clarity is your goal.

4) The Federal Reserve Bank information at the end of the introduction is not cited.

5) Bullet points should not be used in this paper. Everything should be integrated into the paragraphs using transitions.

6) Subtitles should not be used. This is a short paper, 2 - 2 1/2 pages double spaced, and they are not needed.

7) What does this mean: "Globalization makes it possible for huge organizations to comprehend economies of scale "?

8) Do not use the word "we."

9) Since you are discussing globalization, you must explain which country you are discussing. For example, when you say "federal policy," do you mean the United States?Hello professor and classmates,

For this assignment, I will be writing an introduction for my unit 6 essay and providing a third resource . My thesis is highlighted in yellow. If you have any suggestions or thoughts that might help me, please comment below. Thank you all in advance for your feedback.
-Tiffany

Thesis Statement:

Globalization has influenced practically every facet regarding today's lifestyles.

Revised introduction:

Samimi and Jenatabadi (2014) pointed out that although a lot of scholars place the beginnings connected with globalization within contemporary days, some trace its heritage before the Western age. Some scholars regard discovery as well as voyages to the New world, others consider the 3rd century BC. (Samimi& Jenatabadi,2014). Globalization has influenced practically every facet regarding today's lifestyles.

Globalization is a concept that is on many people's minds. Most seem to think that is something new, invented by one U.S. political party or the other. However, some scholars trace its heritage before the Western Age. Whatever its origins, one thing is certain: Globalization has influenced practically every facet of today's life.

I don't remember your paper, so I don't know if this would go with what your paper says. Is knowing the heritage of globalization important for your paper? If not, why is it here?

I suggest adding a sentence before Samimi and Jenatabadi, that may link it all in, Perhaps..... The start period of the world's globalization has been under scrutiny for some time now. Samimi ..

Step 1: Revising or writing

1) 1) Part I: Please choose one of the following

Revise a paragraph or

Add more research to a paragraph or

Add in text citations to a paragraph or

Write the introduction or

Write the conclusion or

Fix plagiarized parts if you have any

Add an APA formatted references page that includes all the sources you plan to use in the Unit 8 paper .

You must have at least three sources: the main article from which you took the ideas of the essay + two additional sources.

2) Be sure the in text citations are in APA format

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