Reference no: EM13779392
FIND AND CORRECT THE PRONOUN ERRORS - 10%
I told my cousin Miles a secret at our last family reunion, and as soon as I did, I knew it would get out. I forgot that Miles is six years younger than me when I told him that I was taking a job overseas. Right before I told her the secret, I said, "Now this is just between you and I, and you're not going to tell anyone, right?" She assured me that the only person he would talk to about it was me. I made the mistake of believing him. If I had taken out a full-page ad in the newspaper to print my secret and delivered it to my family, it could not have been spread around faster. Miles and I are still cousins, but him and me are no longer friends.
CORRECT THE FOLLOWING RUN-ON SENTENCES - 10%
1) There is a new way to find a date in Japan, singles use vending machines to sell information about themselves to others.
2) Men provide personal details in packets to be sold in the machines first the men swear they are not married.
3) A woman chooses to purchase a packet for a couple of dollars in it she will find a picture of a man, his age, and his employment status.
4) The packets also include the men's phone numbers, the women can use the numbers to contact only the men they like.
5) The system seems to be working many of the couples are dating more than once.
6) A lot of Japanese businesspeople use the machines, they do not have time to meet people in other ways.
7) Employees have little opportunity to socialize in Japan it is normal to stay at work until late in the evening.
8) A man might pay almost $50 to put many of his packets into the machines that doesn't mean that women will call him.
9) Japan is famous for its vending machines they are even used to sell meat.
10) Other countries might find it unusual to sell personal information in vending machines, they seem to be working well as matchmakers in Japan.
CORRECT THE FOLLOWING MISPLACED OR DANGLING MODIFIERS - 9%
I love parades, so last year my family and I went to Toronto to see the Caribana parade. It turned out to be even more wonderful than I expected.
Arriving one day before the festivities, the city was already crowded with tourists.
Early the next morning, people set up lawn chairs on Lakeshore Boulevard. We didn't want to miss one float in the parade, so we found our own spot and made ourselves at home. When the parade began, I had as much fun watching the spectators as the parade itself. I saw children pointing at the breathtaking floats sitting on their parents' shoulders. Decorated extravagantly with feathers and sequins, I couldn't believe how beautiful the costumes were.
The crowd was overwhelmed by the sights and sounds of the parade. Marching and playing their instruments with perfect rhythm, everyone especially enjoyed the steel drum bands. They must have practiced the whole year to be that good.
My experience didn't end with the parade, however. After the last float had passed, I found a $20 bill walking up Yonge Street. Now hanging on my wall at home, I framed it as a souvenir of my Caribana experience.
CORRECT THE TRUE RUN-ON SENTENCE - 1%
Martin Luther King led protests during the civil rights movement, his enthusiasm and his will to end discrimination made him a leader, he inspired many people, he continues to be an inspiration to many people.